In your otherwise beautiful poem one verse reads,
Every moment dies a man,
Every moment one is born
If this were true the population of the world would be at a standstill. In truth, the rate of birth is slightly in excess of that of death. I would suggest that the next edition of your poem should read:
Every moment dies a man
Every moment 1 1/16 is born
Strictly speaking the actual figure is so long I cannot get it into a line, but I believe the figure 1 1/16 will be sufficiently accurate for poetry.
Which just goes to show that if they'd had the internet then, things would have been exactly the same.
Also, I love the phrase "sufficiently accurate for poetry".